Kaitlyn Leann Sanchez is running this writing contest on her blog: https://mathiseverywhere439319476.wordpress.com/2019/09/30/kidlit-fall-writing-frenzy/. The rules are to "pick one of the Fall Images (shown) and write about it. You can write a poem, a story, a mood piece, whatever comes to mind. Happy, scary, beautiful, grotesque, whatever suits your fancy for any kidlit age: board book through young adult. Maximum length: 200 words. My entry follows. Jennifer Raudenbush
Twitter: @jenraudenbush Middle Grade short story opening image #11; 197 words MG prize (or PB) United States The Crook in the Lane The sun crept low behind the crooked tree, stealing any traces of warmth. A stinging wind rattled the branches like cracked bones, nipping the crow brothers’ beaks and stinging their beady, black eyes. Their inky bodies cast eerie shadows onto the rumpled blanket of decaying leaves. Maleek sniffed and caught a scent—of old magic and mystery. It was the perfect night for mischief. The carefree whoops of boys playing manhunt carried from around the bend. “Sounds like we have some volunteers for our mayhem,” croaked Krall. From the other end of the crook in the lane, a girl’s humming floated through the autumn air. “Hold on,” said Maleek, raising an ebony wing. “I think a plaything is wandering right toward us.” As Daisy skipped, her footfalls echoed and her braid swished across her shoulders. She rounded the bend to their silhouettes looming against the sunset’s last glowing embers. “Why, hello!” “Caw!” Krall warned, raising a menacing claw. “Screech!” Maleek shrieked, swooping toward her head. Daisy reached calmly into her cloak and … …with a flourish of her wand, poofed the crows into a couple of squawking chickens. After all, it was the perfect night for mischief.
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Melissa Miles
10/9/2019 06:40:58 am
Great opening! I love the way she turns the tables on the crows. :) We were at Highlights together. I hope you are well!
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Jen Raudenbush
10/9/2019 06:47:09 am
Yes, of course--HI, Melissa! Thanks for taking the time to comment, and I'm glad you enjoyed it. I hope you're doing well.
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Anne Lipton
10/10/2019 01:48:54 am
Your writing is beautiful and evocative, and your voice and descriptions really pull me in. I was hoping that the humming girl would get the better of the crows, but I wasn't expecting her to pull a Hermione! Well done! @AnneLipton
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Jen
10/11/2019 12:33:14 pm
Thanks, Anne, for your kind words.
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Rose Cappelli
10/10/2019 10:50:08 am
Your words put me right there in the setting with the characters. Daisy sounds like a character not to be messed with! So glad you described it as an opening because I want more. Good luck, Jen!
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Jen Raudenbush
10/11/2019 12:33:41 pm
Awwww, thanks a bunch, Rose!
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Cathy L Murphy
10/12/2019 01:37:25 pm
I love your descriptive language and the surprise ending, Jen!
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Jen
10/15/2019 08:08:04 am
:-) !!!
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Jen
10/15/2019 08:08:24 am
Thanks!
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Kathy Halsey
10/13/2019 03:24:24 pm
I wasn't sure which way this was going - I was sucked in and worried for our Daisy. Great twist ending and plot.
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Jen
10/15/2019 08:08:47 am
Many thanks, Kathy!
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Kaitlyn Sanchez
10/13/2019 11:43:10 pm
Hahhaha! I love this ending. Great characterization, too. Thanks so much for entering the Fall Writing Frenzy amd sharing your writing with us!
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Jen Raudenbush
10/15/2019 08:09:28 am
It was a lot of fun! Thanks, Kaitlyn.
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