![]() For fun, experience, and awesome prizes, I am entering Susanna's fun Valentine's Day writing contest. See below for my fall entry in her "Halloweensie" story contest. Here is Susanna's description of the "Valentiny" contest rules: "Write a Valentines story appropriate for children (children here defined as ages 12 and under) maximum 214 words in which someone is hopeful! Your someone can hope for something good or something bad. Your story can be poetry or prose, sweet, funny, surprising or anything in between, but it will only count for the contest if it includes someone hopeful (can be the main character but doesn’t have to be) and is 214 words (get it? 2/14 for Valentines Day You can go under the word count but not over! (Title is not included in the word count.)" My entry hops in at a whopping 213 words! Bunnies’ Heart-Shaped Hopes
As fluffy, white flakes fell to the forest floor, two bunnies peered from their burrow. “It’s deeper than Papa’s ears!” squeaked Calliope. “But it’s gotta stop,” said older sister Marisol. “Vole’s Valentine’s Day party is tonight!” Mama cuddled the girls close. “By tonight, the snow may be too deep for your wandering bunny feet.” Calliope blinked back tears. “No candy hearts and valentines.” Marisol’s whiskers twitched. “No music and dancing.” Snow covered the ground like Mama’s quilt. But deep in her belly, Calliope nurtured a glow of promise. She carried that pinprick of light into naptime, where its embers grew and gleamed and danced in her dreams. Marisol pressed her pink nose against the outside door and shook her head. They’d never make it to Vole’s house! As her back leg thumped, an idea sprang up. She hoped she could hop to it in time. Calliope sighed and stretched. When she peeked outside, her eyes widened to the size of chocolate-covered strawberries. Red ribbons swirled like icing atop their family’s pine tree. Velvet hearts swayed from icicle-glazed tree branches. Animals' songs floated through the night sky, speckled with stars. Calliope’s heart swelled to bursting as she grasped Marisol’s outstretched paws. And the two swung in powdered-sugar circles … at their very own Valentine’s party.
26 Comments
2/11/2018 05:52:57 pm
This is a sweet story with a lovely ending. I wish you well with it.
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Jennifer Raudenbush
2/11/2018 08:37:58 pm
Many thanks, Lynn!
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2/11/2018 09:42:11 pm
Cute story I love the images and the lyrical language. Good luck!
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Jen Raudenbush
2/12/2018 09:25:04 am
Thanks, MaryAnn!
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2/12/2018 02:16:51 pm
I like Marisol's determination to make things work out. Very sweet story. Best of luck with it.
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Jennifer Raudenbush
2/12/2018 06:39:32 pm
I appreciate the encouragement, Maria!
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Rose Cappelli
2/12/2018 03:35:14 pm
What a lovely story, Jen! Your use of language is beautiful (I just had to read several sentences more than once!) Thanks for introducing me to Susanna's contests - they are such fun! Best of luck!
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Jennifer Raudenbush
2/12/2018 06:38:52 pm
Thanks for the positive feedback, Rose! She does run fun contests :-) Best of luck to you, too!
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Jen Raudenbush
2/13/2018 04:42:10 pm
Many thanks, Gregory :-) !
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Jennifer Raudenbush
2/14/2018 12:28:48 pm
Thanks for reading it, Patricia!
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Karen
2/14/2018 12:16:42 pm
So pretty! Wonderful and cute story. Paints a picture and a mood. Great job. :)
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Jennifer Raudenbush
2/14/2018 12:29:21 pm
Thanks, Karen! I look forward to reading your story, as well!
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Jilanne Hoffmann
2/14/2018 01:30:57 pm
What a beautiful picture you've painted. Love the images, the lyrical language. And a sweet ending. Well done! Best of luck in the contest!
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Jen Raudenbush
2/14/2018 01:55:32 pm
Jilanne, that's so kind of you. Thanks so much!
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Jennifer Raudenbush
2/15/2018 04:37:37 pm
Many thanks, Amanda!
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Valeria Wicker
2/15/2018 06:21:07 pm
Beautiful lyrical language.
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Jennifer Raudenbush
2/16/2018 10:12:14 pm
Thanks so much, Valeria :-)
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Jen Fier Jasinski
2/15/2018 11:01:10 pm
Great entry, Jen! I, too love the lyrical language and excellent word choice. Wishing you luck!
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Jennifer Raudenbush
2/16/2018 10:12:51 pm
I feel like I'm starting to get the hang of lyrical language :-)
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Becky Scharnhorst
2/16/2018 09:48:23 am
Beautiful language, Jen! And such a sweet story. I love the final image of them dancing in powdered-sugar circles. Best of luck!
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Jennifer Raudenbush
2/16/2018 10:13:16 pm
Awww, thanks, Becky!
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Amy
2/19/2018 09:55:51 am
This story was delightful to read. Every line painted a vivid image in my mind of the characters and events unfolding. 5 stars!
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Jen Raudenbush
2/19/2018 02:00:40 pm
I'm so glad the lines provided vivid images for you. Many thanks!
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