Montgomery Monster Montgomery’s stinky monster feet skit-skeetered down the darkened street. He knocked and shouted, “Trick or Treat!” One thing would make his night complete… Was it fresh meat or maybe bones? The crust of cemetery stones? Montgomery’s ghoulish drool drip-dropped. That thing was here! His heart flip-flopped. Clair opened up the door and froze; a monster stench of toes arose! She shook as shadowed claws stretched out with nails that smelled of sauerkraut. But monster reached inside the dish that overflowed with his one wish. He’s had a taste since he was born For sweet and chewy candy corn! Categories: Halloween, writing, contests, poetry, kidlit, picture book
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Jilanne Hoffmann
11/1/2017 01:32:37 am
Great rhyme! Love the story line. My favorite phrase is "crust of cemetery stones." Quite unusual image. Good luck!
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11/1/2017 03:45:52 am
Fun story. All of your sensory images are amazing, but sauerkraut nails took the cake. Good luck.
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Karen
11/1/2017 11:49:30 am
Love it, Jen! Great language and good ending!
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11/1/2017 12:20:05 pm
I think you described the smell of my sons feet perfectly. ;) Good luck!
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Jennifer Raudenbush
11/1/2017 02:18:43 pm
My son's feet, as well! Thank you, Gregory :-)
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Jen F.
11/1/2017 06:31:27 pm
You had me at "skit-skeetered". Well done, Jen!!
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Jennifer Raudenbush
11/2/2017 06:56:25 am
Ahhhhh, thanks, Jen!
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Jennifer Raudenbush
11/2/2017 06:56:47 am
Thank you, Johnell!
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Delfina Salimbene
11/2/2017 01:14:16 am
Some very fun language. Nice job!
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Jennifer Raudenbush
11/2/2017 06:57:07 am
Many thanks!
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Becky Scharnhorst
11/2/2017 07:37:56 am
This is so much fun, Jen! I love the rhyme and language. Good luck!
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Jennifer Raudenbush
11/2/2017 03:59:20 pm
Thanks, Becky!
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11/7/2017 07:28:13 pm
Fun story, nicely written rhyme, Jennifer! And love that what makes Montgomery's monsterly heart skitter and skip is not meaty bones or cemeteries, but candy corn :) Thanks for joining in the Halloweensie fun!
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Jennifer Raudenbush
11/7/2017 09:24:44 pm
Thanks, Susanna. I'm glad I entered--tons of fun!
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11/8/2017 09:15:15 am
I loved your entry, the rhyme and story was great. I especially loved your use of sauerkraut as a rhyming word...brilliant!
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Jennifer Raudenbush
11/9/2017 04:49:10 pm
Thank you so much, Jean. That's so kind of you!
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